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This is a sketch from a scene in Husband by Hand, a variation on a european fairytale featuring [personal profile] ysabetwordsmith's character Fiorenza the herbalist. In this story, Fiorenza uses her skill to help Bettina, a girl from her village who kneads to find a well bread husband.

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Date: 2011-11-11 08:16 am (UTC)
ysabetwordsmith: Cartoon of me in Wordsmith persona (Default)
From: [personal profile] ysabetwordsmith
The improved detail is good, especially on Bettina.

I think the background is too dark now, though; the table legs, skirt, even the herbs vanish into the shadows.

Re: Thank you!

Date: 2011-11-11 04:15 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
the_vulture says (as LJ is currently too messed up for OpenID to work): I agree. Whilst I really love the addition of detail in this image, I couldn't help but think "Were they baking at night?"

Date: 2011-11-11 01:56 pm (UTC)
aldersprig: (AylaSmile)
From: [personal profile] aldersprig
I'm with Ysabet on the background getting too dark, but I do enjoy the smoky, sultry look Bettina has now.

Husband-bread looks suitably creepy.

Date: 2011-11-11 05:07 pm (UTC)
kelkyag: notched triangle signature mark in light blue on yellow (Default)
From: [personal profile] kelkyag
The background is a little dark now, but I do like the lighting, especially on Fiorenza's face. Is there a wall right behind where the herbs are hung up, or is that a cross-beam and there's a larger space behind them?


Date: 2011-10-07 07:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This turned out really well. I love the depth of field in the composition. The characters look great too. I have linked it on my blog and on the Serial Poetry page in hopes of attracting comments.

Most promising areas for refinement: the women's faces, Bettina's locket, and the leaves of the herbs. I'd leave the dough-man fairly plain since he hasn't been baked yet.

Date: 2011-10-07 08:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I think you did really well with the dresses; they look accurately period to my eye.

And the heart necklace draws the eye very nicely.

Date: 2011-10-07 09:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh, this is wonderful - great work on the figures particularly.

...a girl from her village who kneads to find a well bread husband.

The puns did not go un-groaned at!


Date: 2011-10-09 01:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Yeah, I laughed so hard that [ profile] my_partner_doug came into the office to see what was so funny.

Date: 2011-10-10 03:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
To think I glanced over that...

Thanks for pointing it out. XD

Date: 2011-10-07 09:41 pm (UTC)
ext_162519: Photo of me holding a bobcat I raised (Laughing)
From: [identity profile]
Hehe, your puns cracked me up. But I love this image! I think it's well-composed and a great representation of the poem, and I can't help but smile when I see Bettina looking at her husband-to-be like that. :)

Date: 2011-10-07 10:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Now we have a punster leavening us with laughter!

Date: 2011-10-08 01:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh! I see Basil, and I think Rosemary, and is that third one Mint? Too cool!!

Date: 2011-10-08 02:40 am (UTC)
mdlbear: the positively imaginary half of a cubic mandelbrot set (Default)
From: [personal profile] mdlbear
I'm guessing lavender.

Date: 2011-10-08 02:56 am (UTC)
rowyn: (artistic)
From: [personal profile] rowyn
They're adorable! I love Fiorenza's expression/posture, and the way she's positioned behind and a little in the distance from Bettina and the breadman. It's a good composition.


Date: 2011-10-09 01:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Looking at it again, I noticed that the gazes form an interesting arc, from Fiorenza to Bettina to the bread-man.

Re: Yes...

Date: 2011-10-10 03:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Agreed. The composition has a good visual dynamic.

Date: 2011-10-08 10:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Another one where I went and read the original text because of the picture (and the puns).


Date: 2011-10-09 01:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
That makes me happy. I hoped that this project would have that effect, enticing [ profile] meeksp's audience to investigate the various source projects, and outside audiences to come here to look at the pictures.

Date: 2011-10-10 03:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I really like the composition of this piece, with the three white regions ascending to the upper right quadrant. It makes for a visually dynamic piece. :)

Date: 2011-10-16 10:01 pm (UTC)
eseme: (Default)
From: [personal profile] eseme
This is a great scene straight out of the poem. I do like the fact that Florenza is in the background, helping out as she does. That's very in character.

I also like the unique herbs.

Date: 2011-11-11 07:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This one is coming up well :)

Date: 2011-11-11 02:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Concerning the question of darkness in the updated sketch: perhaps most of the light in the room is coming from the oven, which is positioned somewhere off-camera and to the right? If so, that would explain the prevalence of shadows.

Would a baker of the period put windows into the room that contained his oven? Or would that have been logistically impossible? I'm not really sure of this detail.

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